Don’t get me wrong. I thoroughly enjoyed Dune, seeing it twice, once as the theater and again at home, on the same day. It is an excellent adaptation of half the novel but there is room for some improvement.

A common complaint is that the film doesn’t feel like it has an ending but rather simply stops. This is because there is no arc for the character Paul and the final act lacks an objective for the protagonist to strive for. Both of these elements are simple fixes that could have been done in ADR and maybe a couple of pick-up shoots.

First, when Duncan is telling Paul about the Fremen  it is here that they should have established that the Fremen were bribing the Spacing Guild with spice to keep the skies free of spy satellites. This gets glossed over far too quickly in the current edit.

Next, when Paul and his mother Jessica escape, their guards they should make it clear their goal, now that the House has fallen and the planet is under the control of their enemies, is to make contact with the Fremen to bribe their way off Dune and back to Caladan where they have allies. This give the final act an objective and direction.

In the final scenes after Paul’s duel, the arc is completed when Paul makes the affirmative decision to not run for safety off-world but he will throw his lot with the Fremen. Now there is an emotional payoff to his decision giving the film a better overall shape.

My SF/Noir Vulcan’s Forge is available from Amazon and all booksellers. The novel is dark, cynical, and packed with movie references,